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Ryo : 182535

Kirin v7 Empty Kirin v7

Thu Jan 28, 2021 10:31 pm
Name: Kirin
Element: Lightning
Rank: S
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Special Jutsu Type: --
Backstory: A blisteringly fast technique designed by Sasuke Uchiha for the express purpose of slaying his brother.

Appearance: After encouraging the growth of many storm clouds, the user raises their hand, which becomes wreathed in lightning. When they bring their hand down, a massive lightning creature in the shape of a kirin descends from the sky with an earth-shaking roar and the intense smell of ozone.

Handseals: Tiger > Rat > Horse > Monkey > Dog > Dragon > Ram > Raised Hand > Lowered Hand
Duration: Up to 2 posts, or until reaching the ground
Cooldown: 6 posts
Range: See Below
Power: See Below
Speed: See Below
Health: --
Stat Boosts: --
What it does: A strange technique that encourages the growth of stormclouds, then using lightning-nature chakra to harness the force of nature in the form of a kirin-shaped bolt of lightning.

Once a character learns this technique, they have the option to begin tracking 'cloud counters' (indicated at the end of their posts) in their environment as they or allies use fire release techniques. Every fire release technique used with an external component not used indoors (a hole in the roof will do in a pinch) grants the current environment several cloud counters equal to half of that technique's total power. Techniques that directly generate clouds or storms (such as Tempest release or Rain Tiger At-Will) additionally count towards the generation of counters, at the same rate as Fire Release techniques. These counters do not transfer between threads.

Any particular environment can only have 500 cloud counters in play at a time. 100 cloud counters make the environment significantly overcast, 300 causes thunder and a torrential downpour, and 500 creates a vicious storm. Any techniques that specifically clear or alter weather may target the user's number of cloud counters as though it were targeting a Health pool. Please note that pre-existing weather conditions are entirely independent of the number of cloud counters in play - establishing a storm narratively does not give you any counters. The range considered to be the current environment' is a 5km radius.

Upon casting this technique, the user selects an origin point for the technique between seventy-five and one hundred and fifty meters in the air (within a 75-meter radius of the user, measuring horizontally). This point cannot be within twenty-five meters of another character. The natural lightning invoked by Kirin travels at 350,000 kilometers per hour, moving from the clouds to the technique's origin point' instantaneously, causing it to originate from the selected point effectively.

Rather than scaling from the user's stats, this technique's stats are gained by spending the number of cloud counters currently in the environment. Please note that using Kirin will spend all cloud counters in play, with no option to spend partially - however, the user may divide them as they see fit. For example, a character with 400 cloud counters built up may generate Kirin with 220 Speed and 180 Power. Kirin does not have a Health stat.  Only once the lightning bolt reaches the origin point that the user assume control to guide it, slowing it to the speed 'purchased' from the cloud counter pool and creating the visible kirin shape.

Upon assuming control of the lightning bolt at its origin point, it transforms into the lightning bolt kirin seen above. It is a shaped mass of lightning with a fifteen meter diameter, and it effectively moves as a beam from the origin point, stretching down as far as it needs to go to strike the earth.

The user can manipulate its precise path, but it must constantly be moving downwards towards the earth on its trajectory to the ground. It cannot move horizontally more than fifty meters in any direction from the direct downwards path from the origin point. Upon striking the earth, the kirin shape loses cohesion to transform back into a regular lightning bolt in an explosive flash of light, creating an explosion of electrical charge and superheated air with a diameter of thirty meters. This includes underground, completely totalling any structures or earth within blast range that it is powerful enough to destroy.

Character Specific: --
Wordcount to learn: 5,000
Action Cost: 100, 50 upkeep
Mastery: Y, for handseals only
Bonus Requirements: Chidori, least six other Fire or Lightning element Ninjutsu of ranks A or S
Canon, Custom, Bloodline, or Village Exclusive: Canon

Revamp, I think? I believe the old one was archives.

Last edited by Murata on Tue May 11, 2021 3:42 pm; edited 3 times in total
Ichigo Sato
Ichigo Sato
Ryo : 61150

Kirin v7 Empty Re: Kirin v7

Fri Feb 19, 2021 9:24 am
Hello josie, it's me, Sakata I'll be the Trial looking over your app.

- "begin tracking", how exactly does this work? Throughout a thread the user can gather counters which then have to be used in the same thread? 

- "a number of cloud counters equal to half of the power of that technique", equal to half of the base power or after scaling?

Since it's a S-Rank technique and because of the manipulation part, I'd like you to change the Action Cost to 100 and a possible upkeep similar to that number.

Thank you.
Ryo : 182535

Kirin v7 Empty Re: Kirin v7

Fri Feb 19, 2021 8:57 pm
Clarified that counters do not transfer between threads and that they should be tracked post to post like AP.

It's total Power, clarified that.

How's 100 with 50 Upkeep?
Ichigo Sato
Ichigo Sato
Ryo : 61150

Kirin v7 Empty Re: Kirin v7

Sat Feb 20, 2021 4:34 pm
Works for me.

Trial Approved, with the understanding that "350,000 kilometers per hour" is used to describe the travel is instantaneously.
Mizuki Ohta
Mizuki Ohta
Ryo : 233650

Kirin v7 Empty Re: Kirin v7

Mon Mar 01, 2021 8:23 pm
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