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Thu Nov 26, 2020 5:41 pm
Name: Leaf Great Whirlwind
Element: -
Rank: B
Specialty: Taijutsu
Special Jutsu Type: Manouver
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Appearance: 
Handseals: -
Duration: 1 Post
Cooldown: 2 Posts
Range: Contact
Power: -
Speed: -
Health: -
Stat Boosts: +30 Strength & Speed
What it does: 
While spinning, the user delivers a series of kicks, starting from a low kick and linking into a middle kick and high kick, then finishing off with a heel drop. As the rotation speed picks up, the user gains buoyancy, which they use to shift into gradually higher attacks.


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Wordcount to learn: 1500
Action Cost: 30
Mastery: No
Bonus Requirements: -
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Last edited by Ryuuzaki Nara on Sun Nov 29, 2020 10:00 pm; edited 1 time in total
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Sun Nov 29, 2020 8:21 pm
Sup Ryuuzaki, I'll be the one doing the first part of the grading.

Considering how the technique works I'd change the wording a bit to the one from the wiki: "While spinning, the user delivers a series of kicks" and then just what you wrote. Cause as it is worded now, it sounds a bit like the user is just kicking while the spinning is a bit of a precedent to the rest of the technique.

For the stat boosts I'm going to ask you to lower them to +30, because as a maneuver it'll gain a self-contained buff to that power/speed based on the rank of the technique, in this case B-Rank. In turn you can also lower the wordcount and AP cost to respectively 1500 and 30.

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