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[V7] Thunderclap Arrow Empty [V7] Thunderclap Arrow

Wed Oct 07, 2020 8:28 pm
Name: Thunderclap Arrow
Element: Lightning
Rank: D/B
Specialty: Ninjutsu
Special Jutsu Type: --
Backstory: --


Appearance: A glowing bolt of electricity the color the user chooses, longer than it is wide. It vaguely resembles an arrow.
D: The arrow is 50 cm long and 10 cm wide and tall. It is largely transparent.
B: The arrow is 1 meter long and 15 cm wide and tall. It is translucent.

Handseals:
D: Ram > Ox
B: Ram > Ox > Snake > Rat
Duration: Until max range is reached
Cooldown: 2/4 posts
Range: 10 meters/20 meters
Power: 10/30
Speed: 10/30 OR throwing speed, read below
Health: --
Stat Boosts: --
What it does: After forming the handseals, the user gathers lightning chakra in one of their limbs before shooting it outwards at jutsu speed, OR at throwing speed- however, to launch at throwing speed, the limb needs to rear back noticeably as if they're gearing up to throw. In other words, minute twitches of the arms or legs would not work. As a result, this tech's throwing speed version cannot be used if the user is rendered immobile. Once launched, this technique travels in a straight line.

The user and their equipment are immune to this technique while still being formed and when the back end of the 'arrow' reaches 1 meter away from their body, but after that, they can be harmed like anyone else.

This lightning technique is unique in the sense that it can be used in collaboration with water techniques. If the user or an ally casts the water techniques, the part of the water jutsu struck by this technique will gain collaboration bonuses while also being able to shock people who come into contact with it at this jutsu's power. Notably, this jutsu does not gain collaboration bonuses; only the water technique does. This does not damage the original technique. (For example, if this tech is used this technique on a friendly water clone or a water needle, only ONE clone/needle would be affected at a time. However, if used on a great vortex, since it's all one body of water, the whole thing would be affected. Needless to say, this technique cannot be used to electrify gaseous techniques like Hidden Mist)

For clarification's sake, only A rank and below water techniques may be affected in this manner. Shocking lasts for the same duration as the water technique.

If used on a hostile water jutsu, the same thing applies to the collaboration bonus; however, for it to be electrified, it needs to have lower health or power (if health is not applicable) than the power of this jutsu.

Contact with this jutsu sends severe electric shocks up and down the target's whole body at jutsu power. If it strikes a construct or something else, normal jutsu clashing rules occur.

Character Specific: --
Wordcount to learn: 500/1,500. Words from the previous rank count towards the next one.
Action Cost: 10/30 AP
Mastery: Yes
Bonus Requirements: --
Canon, Custom, Bloodline, or Village Exclusive: Canon revamp

Revamp of this, except I'm merging it with a canon jutsu that basically does the same thing

https://naruto.fandom.com/wiki/Lightning_Release:_Thunderclap_Arrow


Last edited by Shika Yabusame on Thu Oct 08, 2020 9:08 pm; edited 1 time in total
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[V7] Thunderclap Arrow Empty Re: [V7] Thunderclap Arrow

Thu Oct 08, 2020 8:35 pm
Okie, so there is one minor concern I have with the collaboration effect of the technique. I would suggest making it so only Water jutsu A-rank and below this technique strikes will gain the unique collaboration effect instead of all Water Release jutsu since I think a D/B rank jutsu being able to affect an S-rank technique with a unique effect potentially sounds a little bit too powerful, even if the shocking effect is at this technique's jutsu power. This is especially excessively powerful considering the size of S-rank Water techniques, which usually encompass large areas that a D/B rank jutsu should not be able to effect as I see it. 

Also, for better clarification, I suggest making it clear that the shocking effect lasts for the duration of the water jutsu struck by the arrow. 

Other than those points, everything else looks great!
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[V7] Thunderclap Arrow Empty Re: [V7] Thunderclap Arrow

Thu Oct 08, 2020 9:08 pm
Sounds reasonable, donezo.
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[V7] Thunderclap Arrow Empty Re: [V7] Thunderclap Arrow

Thu Oct 08, 2020 9:35 pm
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[V7] Thunderclap Arrow Empty Re: [V7] Thunderclap Arrow

Thu Oct 08, 2020 10:44 pm
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[V7] Thunderclap Arrow Empty Re: [V7] Thunderclap Arrow

Sun Mar 21, 2021 6:41 am
Pulled for edits

-If used on a hostile water jutsu, the same thing applies sans the collaboration bonus, however in order for it to be electrified it needs to have lower health than the power of this jutsu.' 

This will be edited in to be power or health since a lot of water techs don't have health
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[V7] Thunderclap Arrow Empty Re: [V7] Thunderclap Arrow

Wed Mar 31, 2021 7:18 am
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