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Twilight
Twilight
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Thu Jul 14, 2016 11:07 pm
It has been a while since Twilight was able to pass the genin exam, now he had used enough time to rest so it was time to continue his training which is what he will do as he wakes up early in the morning as usual and after freshening up and eating he heads to the training grounds with Spectra moving truthfully beside him. On the way they decided they should at least drop by to greet a few family friends and at least drop in after a long while, since his parents died he had noone to cater for him or care about him but these people still check on him usually because they were friends to his parents but that wasn't the issue at hand now. After doing his drop by he continues his journey with Spectra to the training grounds and upon reaching there he met a ninja also practicing. Before making himself noticeable, he took his time to study the ninja a bit, it was like the ninja was training without moving or releasing anything, was it a sort of mind training? Twilight was still new to all these so he would approach him innocently(red for Twilight, yellow for the Npc(Hirashin)) Hello..... Hey mister trying to get his attention as the ninja turns around to face Twilight yes, can I help you? yes actually, if you don't mind, what are you doing? I'm here to train and I wouldn't mind a training partner to make things easier I'm training my illusion arts and I don't mind also having someone to use my techniques on great you're a genjutsu practitioner, I could use this opportunity to practice that technique. I read about in the ninja academy, the technique used to break out of illusions that's ok, by the way my name is hirashin oh sorry, where are my manners my name is Twilight and this is pointing to his wolfdog Spectra he then turns to Spectra sit! and Spectra sits, he then turns to face Hirashin just tell me when you're ready I am, let's do this ok he then makes an handseal and channels his chakra into Twilight's system to create images in Twilight's head, making him see things that are not actually there. To Twilight he didn't even notice anything, he wondered when the nin will actually cast a genjutsu on hin then he tries to rest on a chair behind him to relax and wait for him but then his butt went right through the chair and he fell but based on ninja's instincts he jumped right back to his feet again that was surprising, the chair was supposed to hold me, wait a minute, this must be the illusion. But is this how it feels? Wow, I must work on my genjutsu detection further but that won't be now he then makes the tiger handseal and concentrates really hard making his chakra flow rapidly through him in order to flush out Hirashin's chakra disruption and break out of the illusion and suddenly things around before start to disappear wow, you actually did it, you broke out of my illusion, good job he claps thank you very much.
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Fri Jul 15, 2016 4:58 am

Hi there, great to see you already getting started but in future, please use paragraph breaks when writing. A solid wall of text is really hard for mods to read - especially old mods with weak eyes like me - and review. Thank you! <3)
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Fri Jul 15, 2016 8:59 am
Ok, maybe I will next time, I'm not good with paragraphs
Now I want to try one of my elemental techniques, I saw it in a scroll from my dad's library. I had been meaning to train it but it was too hard for me then as I was still a student then but I promised that it will be one of the set of techniques I will learn when I get to Genin rank by passing the genin exam and what technique might that be? its not a big technique as that, its just the moving earth core technique, I have plans for the technique and it is really useful the way I see it moving earth core technique, that means your affinity must be earth release yes, why? wow that's great, I'm also of the earth release affinity wow that is indeed great yes it is pardon me but can I ask you another question? sure what is it? I hope you don't mind that my questions are getting too much? not at all, tell me what it is ok, please what is your rank? oh me? Well I'm Genin rank but I will be Chuunin soon wow that's great, that means you must have a lot of experience as a genin about to become chuunin, I'm so lucky to have met you here yeah, I could say I have a lot of experience as a genin and have learned a lot but I won't actually see it as luck finding me here whatever you say I still believe I'm lucky ok then, you are entitled to your opinion so, since you have more experience and you said that earth is your affinity could you mind teaching me some earth techniques? sure, which one do you want to start with, I've finished my training for today ok, I would prefer we start with the technique I mentioned earlier, the moving earth core technique oh sure, sure well its simple all you just do is try as much as possible to gather you chakra into the ground but seeing as you just started these high ranks let's start with some basic training, now I want you to transfer your chakra into the ground and keep it inside there for a really long time, the chakra must not disperse aye sensei he then closes his eyes together to concentrate harder to channel his chakra into the ground as a stick hits him on his head ouch, what was that? you're stupid, so if you were in a battle with a real master or pro, would you close your eyes whenever you want to do a technique? Remember a second is enough to cause death so it is necessary to keep your focus on your opponent always so you don't get any trick attack hit. I would have loved to elaborate more on that but this isn't battle training so I can't please sensei go on, I will do both at once shut up and do what I instructed you to do and don not close your eyes again unless you want another head hit with a stick yells ok sensei he says as he gathers up his chakra, this time it was much more harder as his eyes were wide open when he channeled the chakra into the ground. Now the hard part was over and now he has to sustain the chakra in the ground and also be able to move it around in the ground without it dispersing. This sounded easier and felt easier but after a few minutes, Twilight was already sweating from keeping his chakra in the ground for so long and not allow it to disperse then it finally dispersed, he held the chakra for 10 minutes but Hirashin was bent on the fact that Twilight must maintain it for an hour before they could continue to learn the technique. Also Twilight was really determined and so after resting a bit, he began again, maitaining it for longer time but still not the specified time, Twilight trained for series of hours non-stop and finally, he was able to sustain it for 1 hour and they began the next segment. Hirashin told him to raise small boulders of earth from the ground and maintain it in air for another one hour. To Twilight it seemed impossible, was the other Genin trying to injure him? But Twilight was bent on being the best so all this didn't matter to him at all as he would one again focus hard trying incredibly hard not to close his eyes then after good concentration, he channeled his chakra into the earth great, the first part is done now to proceed Twilight then concentrates harder to use the chakra in the ground to lift up something, anything but the chakra just disperses in the ground. Twilight tries it again but still fails then he concentrates harder and lifts up a pebble and Hirashin claps good, you're making improvement but what I want you to lift is this size he demonstrates the size with his hand and continues maybe the chakra you're pooling into it is not enough, channel more chakra and lift it aye sensei Twilight then starts over again but this time with large concentration he was able to channel great amount of chakra into the ground to lift the boulder of rock but as it got up, it crashed straight to the ground and scatters good, now all that's left is for you to maintain it, now start over what seemed impossible for Twilight at the start now started to become easy, Twilight was now able to easily channel his chakra into the ground but now he had to use his power to sustain the boulder like he did with his chakra in the ground so at once, he channels his chakra into the ground once again and uses it to lift the boulder as before but now with further concentration he was able to sustain the boulder in the air for one full hour but he was starting to get exhausted from the hard long series of training this will be my last for today he says to himself then Hirashin skipped in surprise, the boy was getting by quite fast, it was quite hard for him when he started wow, you are talented kid, you are getting by very fast and its marvelous. Now you're ready for the moving earth core technique. The trainings we did earlier was to make the technique easy for you to perform ok, sensei now just apply what I taught you eralier to raise a large piece of the ground, this time don't make it loose connection to the ground, have you seen the technique before? yes sensei good so now perform it aye sensei Twilight then begins to channel his chakra into the earth then utilizing the trainings he had earlier learned he simply raises the earth upwards the size of the platform was 5m by 5m and he raised it 10m upwards to raise Hirashin's position upwards Hirashin claps and was surprised he got his at his first trial nice work kiddoo, I'm amazed you got it at your first trial, now you know it great but that will be all for me today, I'm exhausted, I will continue tomorrow.
[Claiming: Genjutsu Release, Doton: Moving earth core, 534 + 1218 =1752 claiming +8 stats]
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Fri Jul 15, 2016 7:31 pm
You cannot say maybe you will, you were requested to adjust your writing by a moderator.  You need to go through this, add paragraph breaks, and write in the third person for conversation.  You cannot simply change color for people talking.

Twilight begins speaking to the man. "How are you doing today?"  The man laughs heartily, "I'm doing fine my boy how are you?"

This is the writing style everyone follow on this site, if you have a problem writing this way we urge you to practice so everyone can understand what you write.
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