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PostSubject: Kinzoku Nazar   Thu Sep 08, 2016 2:13 am

Suna Contest Application
 
Kinzoku "Gun Slinger" Nazar
 
Basic Information 
Age: 21
Birthday: August 8th
Gender: Male


Appearance: Kinzoku stands 6ft3, weighing at about 190lbs of pure muscles due to being a part of the Nazar clan. Though his muscles are not the massive kind that bulge through clothing. He has a toned and cut physique with nearly 0 percent body fat. On his right arm he has 21 tattoos circling his bicep, each one expressing something that signified that year of his life. Now the tattoos have begun moving further down towards his forearm. Despite the beliefs of the Nazar clan, Kinzoku has grown his hair out to reach just under his jaw line. He also lets his facial hair grow but trims it to keep it from over-growing. His hair, facial hair, as well as his eyes are all a hazelnut color. His entire left arm is made of steel with sharpened finger tips and a sharpened elbow blade. He wears a black vest with an opened-up black jacket with the inside of it being red. On top of all of this he wears a steel chest plate as his flak jacket which connects to shoulder pads, each one have a red circle in the middle bearing the Nazar clan symbol. He wears long black pants held up by a belt with a holster for his revolver. He wears black boots similar looking to cowboy boots. Finally, he wears a black hat with a red outline. There is also a red center piece to the hat which also holds the Nazar clan symbol

Personality: Based on his attire, Kinzoku may seem as the "evil" kind of guy, one who may be intimidating and impossible to approach. However that is not who he is as a person. Kinzoku is a very friendly person who tends to get along with everyone. He'll never shy away from a conversation or meeting new people. He also enjoys helping out other people whenever they need it, probably a side effect from being raised as a Nazar. Overall he tends to follow the customs of the Nazar clan rather thoroughly, except for going bald. He was never fond of having no hair what so ever and believed that was an old custom of the first Nazar clan members. Though things have changed since then, and he saw no reason not to keep his hair if it wasn't distracting him from more important matters.
  
When he's alone and not helping others or simply spending time with them, he's either somewhere peaceful meditating, enjoying a cigar or working on his physical conditioning. Mediating is Kinzoku's number one method to Enlightenment. It's his way of keeping true to himself and finding that light through thick and thin.
 
He is also all about justice and following the establishment. Anyone who is unjust, abuses their power, and takes advantage of people in need and the weak, Kinzoku doesn't take very kind to them.

History:
Kinzoku's history started with his grandfather when he went on his Coming of Age journey. His grandfather traveled around as best as he could in order to see what the world had to offer. His coming of age journey took a turn when he arrived to Suna. In Suna he met a girl. The two clicked right from the get go and he spent every day he was in Suna with her. Though his travels to Suna marked the end of his journey for it was reaching the one year mark, when he must return to his clan and prove to them he had reached enlightenment. His grandfather did not want to leave the girl however, as his feelings for her grew stronger and stronger every passing moment. So he decided not to return home to his clan and community and stayed in Suna to make a new life with the girl. His clan deemed his journey as a failure for one must return to their clan after their journey. However his grandfather was not going to let that stop him, and he continued practicing the traditions of the Nazar clan in Suna. He deemed himself as having reached enlightenment, and with the continued practice of their clans traditions, he saw no reason to need the approval of the two head members of the clan. His new home became Suna. He continued living his life as a member of Suna, raising in their ranks as a shinobi and building a home for himself. Soon the two had a baby boy Jiki. Once he was of age, his grandfather began teaching Jiki the traditions of the Nazar clan just as they would have back in the Volcano village.
 
When Kinzoku's father Jiki came of age for his Journey, he had already proven himself as a prominent Nazar member. He was in peek physical condition, mentally strong, and his prowess in the art of steel affinity was rivaled by few. All he needed to do now was do his one year journey, reach enlightenment and he'd become the ideal image of a Nazar. Jiki too traveled the shinobi world to see what it had to offer. Surprisingly enough, Jiki met another Nazar member who was currently on her Coming of Age journey as well. The two decided to continue their journey together. The more time Jiki spent with her, Sue, the more he realized that she was not too fond of her home. The only reason she had stayed was because her family and community were there. Jiki managed to convince her to come to Suna with him. He told her how friendly everyone was and how great of a place the village was, minus the fact it was always hot and surrounded by sand. Jiki managed to convince Sue. Sue even brought along some of her brothers and sisters from her community back at home as they began a small Nazar community of their own in Suna. This was seen as a successful Coming of Age journey for Jiki as his father had granted it.
 
A couple of years later Sue got pregnant and gave birth to boy who they named Kinzoku. High expectations were place onto Kinzoku because he was born from two Nazar's making him a pure blood. The brothers and sisters Sue had brought over from her Coming of Age trip also began finding partners, having kids and growing the community. Of the new generation, Kinzoku was the oldest. The next up were two years younger than he was. The moment Kinzoku reached the age of five he began the practices of the Nazar clan. First, his head was shaved and five tattoos were added to his right bicep, determined by his parents since he was too young to know what marked his earlier childhood. His father was tasked with getting his body into peek form. Since Kinzoku was only five, the training was not that extreme. But every year he got older, the training got harder. Each time it was meant to increase his physical capabilities making sure he was nothing short of perfection. His mother was tasked with making sure his mental strength was on track with his physical training. Without strong mental fortitude, one could never complete the training it required to become a true Nazar. The major training method used was meditation. It allowed Kinzoku to bring body and mind together and be one with himself. Much like his father, Kinzoku excelled in pretty much everything he was tasked with. One thing his father noticed Kinzoku excelled in the most was the use of projectiles. He had an uncanny proficiency to it at a young age that allowed him to have the proficieny many people didn't obtain until they began training as shinobis. Jiki used it to Kinzoku's own advantage making the young Nazar as proficient as possible. Considering how Kinzoku was still a child, he saw these training tasks as annoying and very hard. He wanted to go out and play and to be a kid, but his parents training left little time for such luxuries. As a result, the grueling training lead to Kinzoku becoming much more mature than someone his age should have allowed.
 
In his spare time whenever he could manage to get some, Kinzoku loved finding gadgets and taking them apart to see how they worked and rebuild them. From this he would also learn to build his own gadgets and weapons. His very first creation was a sling shot. Since his accuracy had become his unique skill, a sling shot only increased the range of his projectiles. By the age of eight he had built his own bow. At ten he improved it allowing him to store arrows inside the bow increasing the amount of arrows he could carry on him. He soon became just as efficient with the bow as he was with shurikens and kunais and it quickly became his go to. He asked his father if he could enlist into the academy to become a shinobi of Suna. Having lived in such a tight nit community and being the oldest of the new generation, he felt a though it were his duty to protect them, also enforced by the expectations placed on him by his clan. His father declined his request, stating that the establishment would only get in the way of his training and prevent him from completing it. For the next seven odd years, Kinzoku was put through treacherous physical tests and tremendously exhausting mental tests in order to prepare him for his journey. His parents were extremely tough on him and the following years were nothing short of hell for him.
 
Coming of Age Journey:
Kinzouki had finally reached the age of 18 and the tattoos on his right arm exemplified it. Most were about how he had surpassed many of the grueling challenges placed on him by his parents. It was his turn to leave Suna and travel the world to see what it had to offer. Though it was around this time that their Kazekage Amane Uchiha had gone missing. As a result there was a lot of "restlessness" in the village with the uncertainty of where the village stood. Kinzoku did not want to leave his family at a time like this with the distress that was going on. But he was left with no choice. Shortly after someone named Azaiyo had taken up the mantle, Kinzoku was set and ready to leave. He knew very little of this person and could only hope that he would maintain what Suna and built. After all it was his home, and were his community lived. The safety of his community and the following generations was a major concern to Kinzoku, partially because his parents had instilled a sense of "protection" along with all the responsibility they said he would have.
 
Kinzoku set out to travel the world just as his father and grandfather had before him. Maybe if he were lucky he too would find his eventual partner. Thanks to his parents, he had both the physical condition and the mental capacity needed to live on your own while traveling. One thing Kinzoku really enjoyed during his training process was the practice of manipulating steel, a technique passed down throughout the Nazar clan. His training in the manipulation of steel had started rather late and he was no too proficient in its use. So throughout the next year of travels, one thing Kinzoku looked to improve on was increasing his proficiency with the steel affinity.
 
His travels began with simply visiting many small villages found around Suna, after all it was a massive country. Back at home Kinzoku had never really met anyone outside of his community since he was always training with his parents. When he wasn't training he was usually with the younger kids of his community. Once he started meeting new people from these small villages, he started falling in love with people in general. These people were extremely kind, allowing him a place to stay for a night, providing him with a place to sleep and all he had to do was a little bit of work in and around the house. For these people, these tasks may have seemed difficult. But they were nothing for the Nazar member. A little bit of easy work for a place to stay and a meal was something Kinzoku could not turn down.
 
Throughout his travels Kinzoku changed weapons. He built a completely new crossbow with a mag placed below it which stored all his bolts. Instead of having a string fire the bolts and have to be pulled back he figured out how to use bursts of chakra to fire the bolts. Thanks to his mother's training, Kinzoku was quite proficient with the use of his chakra. It took little chakra to fire a single bolt. With his new weapon of choice, he finally left the land of Sand. He travelled through the mountains now. There were a lot less villages around here forcing Kinzoku to live off of the land. His parents training had prepared him for this, and with his improved cross bow he was able to survive quite well. With all the alone time he had, most of it was spent meditating. He felt it bringing himself closer with nature as well as himself.
His travels later brought him to forests. Here it was easier to find places to rest at, but for the most part he stayed in the forests and lived in the wilderness. He had grown accustom to it during his time in the mountains. Kinzoku hadn't noticed it, but he was in the forests of Konoha. However, the moment he found himself standing in front of the walls surrounding the hidden leaf village he knew exactly where he was. This village was one of Suna's greatest allies and Kinzoku was looking forward to seeing what they people of Konoha were like. Upon arriving into Konoha, Kinzoku began inspecting the way of life in Konoha. His clan had the Will of Steal, this village had the Will of Fire. And he could see it in their shinobi. He could see why Konoha and Suna were strong allies, they both embodied similar values. The best way Kinzoku knew how to acquaint himself with the village was to get to know the people. So that's exactly what he did. The major of what he did was volunteer work. The satisfaction he got for helping out people in need was greater than no other. He seemed to thrive off of helping others, it had become a part of who he was. And it all started the moment he left Suna for his journey. It was here that Kinzoku was informed that a former Konoha nin by the name of Koroshi Uchiha had taken over the mantle as Kazekage. He found it quite odd to have a Konoha nin instead of one from Suna. Though he did not think much of it, for the people of Konoha were nothing short of great. If this man had the capabilities to lead a village then he'd probably be accepted with open arms, at least by Kinzoku.
 
Shortly after he found that out, word had gotten around that Suna had been attacked by the Shukaku. Kinzoku took this news badly. He had to get back home and see how his community was doing, and the village as a whole. The very next day Kinzoku left Konoha and set out for his home. After an extended period of time he eventually made his home, nearly unrecognizable. His hair had grown down to the length of his shoulders and he had started growing a stubble. He was happy to see that his community were all good, having been taken to safety by the Jounin of the village. Though repairs were still in progress it was good to see the village in high spirits. Unfortunately, his grandfather having been a Jounin did not survive the battle. By the time Kinzoku arrived, they had already performed the Nazar death ritual and sent the grandfather away in a volcano. Now his journey came to an end. His parents deemed it a success and that Kinzoku had reached enlightenment. However, he had grown quite fond of his hair. Having grown it while he was in the process of reaching enlightenment and having been out being one with the wilderness, he had grown attached to it. Through much convincing, Kinzoku managed to get his parents approval. Though he had to cut it shorter down to his jaw line. It was time to become a shinobi for him. What better way to be able to help the people of Suna out like the shinobi had done during the Shukaku attack. He, along with two of his younger "brothers" from the community enrolled into the academy together.
 
Academy:
Kinzoku was now 19 years of age about to turn 20. He was both older and taller than everyone in the academy standing 6f3 tall. He clearly had no place being in the academy and could have ascended to Genin right then and there with all the training his parents put him through. He also had the accuracy with projectiles as good as a well seasoned Chunin. Though he saw no reason not to go to the academy. It gave him the chance to meet the soon-to-be shinobi of his class.

Many of the students were intimidated by Kinzoku because he was both older and a lot more talented than them. But that changed quickly as they got to know him. Kinzoku was friendly with every single one of them. Not only did he get to know each student, but he helped them with their studies as well as their training. He soon became a class favorite to all students.
 
When it came time from the Genin exam, Kinzoku took it along with his two community brothers and passed it with grace. The three were placed into a team together due to the fact they worked so well with one another and had essentially grown up together.
 
Genin:
Now a Genin, Kinzoku began increasing his proficiency in the use of Ninjutsu with the help of both his sensei and his parents. He felt it was the first step to becoming a true Nazar shinobi. Kinzoku and his brothers were put through basic training drills for basic skills such as teamwork. But teamwork was no problem for the three of them, they worked together like limbs from the same body, it was almost uncanny. Though basic, they handled missions with ease. Kinzoku had excelled in the use of weapons and ninjutsu drastically. He had become so proficient through the massive amount of time and training he put into it that he had no problem controlling earth, fire and steel affinities. When he was with his team he was practicing the use of his kenjutsu and ninjutsu skills. When he was on his own he was building new gadgets and weapons. He built a sword for his brother Kumo and a special set of daggers for his other brother Bronn.
 
The Suna Genin team had completed the majority of their missions with relative ease and were ready to take the next step, though there were no Chuunin exams happening anywhere. So the team requested that they take up a high ranked mission, one usually offered to Chuunin and Jounin. As a team they would complete this mission and if completed would be promoted to Chuunin. They were ready, and showed it time after time. Their request was approved.
 
The village had been infiltrated the night past by wanderer shinobi and they had stolen documents from the village. Their mission was to catch up with the wanderer nins and retrieve the stolen documents by any means necessary. The mission tasked with founding out how they got in, probably due to a mole in the inside, was tasked to the higher ranked shinobi as they had the necessary resources and skills to complete it. If they completed the mission they would be promoted to Chuunin. With the help of their sensei who was permitted to accompany them on the mission, they managed to track down the 3 men hidden somewhere in a tomb out in the desert. Two of them escaped the tomb when they realized they had been found. Bronn and sensei went after them as himself and Kumo stayed for the last one. They entered the tomb to face the man. The two of them out matched him together and easily took him out. Though he did not have the documents on him. During their exit to join their other two teammates, Kinzoku had accidently set off a trap the three set prior to the Suna team arriving. The trap set off a chain reaction of explosions in the exit. His brother managed to push Kinzoku out of the tomb before being hit by the full force of the trap. Kinzoku crashed across the sand falling unconscious due to the concussive blast. When he finally woke up he found himself in a hospital bed with his brother Bronn and sensei waiting for him to wake. The first thing he asked was where his brother Kumo was, but he did not make it. He had given his life in order to make sure Kinzoku made it out. Kinzoku noticed shortly after that he had lost his entire left arm in the explosion. All that was left was a stubble wrapped in bandages. Had it not been for his brother he would have lost his life also. But they managed to complete the mission. In the end, he and Bronn were promoted to Chuunin.  
 
Chuunin:
Kinzoku was now 20 years old and a newly appointed Chuunin. The first thing he was to do as a Chuunin was get his arm back. His former sensei as well as the hospital doctors informed Kinzoku that Suna had the talent required in order to have him given a completely new arm that would seem as though he had never lost one. Kinzoku jumped right on the opportunity to get his arm back. But before he went through with the procedure he got an idea. He had become quite good in creating weapons, tools and gadgets. He also knew the one thing Suna was well known for was also their puppet-nins. He canceled the surgery to get a replica arm and searched for a well versed puppet-nin. After a lot of searching and researching, Kinzoku found a puppet-nin and proposed his idea. With the puppet-nin's help, the two of them were going to build Kinzoku a left arm made of metal. It was going to be both a weapon and an armor piece for Kinzoku, and with his control over the steel affinity he would have no problem moving the arm. It wasn't the best idea aesthetically, and his parents were against it, obviously. They argued it was against the Nazar tradition and that they had already permitted him to keep his hair. This was overboard. But Kinzoku was not going to let his parents stop him. This was going to have no affect on Kinzoku's enlightenment and would only increase his prowess as a shinobi. It was in his best interest as a shinobi to go through with it.
 
With his knowledge on inventing and the use of steel and the puppet-nins knowledge and expertise, the two of them worked day in and day out to create a steel arm. In no time, the two had created al steel arm which Kinzoku could freely control with his control over the element. It was similar to a puppet arm, simply being allow and made of metal. Though that was done on purpose. Over time Kinzoku would come up with new ideas and ways of weaponizing the arm. The arm was currently made as a "shell" which would be able to hold new attachments and upgrades. He went to the hospital with his metal are and had them surgically attach this steel arm instead of a "real" one. After many hours of surgery, the arm had been surgically attached to his stub making it seem as though his shoulder seamlessly shifted from skin to metal. It took the Chuunin some time to get use to control his arm through the use of his steel affinity. But Kinzoku was use to trecherous training conditions due to his parents, so he put himself through the same doing whatever it took. Within no time Kinzoku had full manipulation over the arm, almost as though he had been born with it.
 
Now with his fully functional limb, Kinzoku got right back to training as a shinobi, creating armor, weapons and tools, and helping people around the village. Everything he loved to do. He soon got an idea for a new weapon which would eventually replace his crossbow. This was a gun, a weapon yet to be seen but may very well revolutionize long ranged combat as a whole. When he trained, it was usually with his former partner and brother Bronn. The two were nearly inseperable. They even completed missions together, and they completed many missions. If there were ever a mission posting available for shinobi of their rank they didn't hesitate to take it. After a year of being a chuunin, Kinzoku felt like his training had fully prepared him to be a Jounin. He presented himself to the elders of the village along with his "resume". He was told it would take some time to look over it and consider his promotion. But Kinzoku knew he was qualified for it. It took a couple of days (two days more than needed) for Kinzoku to hear from the elders, but he had been approved. He was now a Jounin of the Hidden Sand village.
 
Jounin:
With his new authority and resources Kinzoku used it to the best of his advantage to help out other people whatever it may be. His parents had grown quite proud of their son, as well as the rest of the community. He had been born a full-blood Nazar, as well as the oldest one in the next generation of his community. As a result a lot of pressure had been put on him to perform, and he had not disappointed.
 
Also, being a Jounin meant he'd be given more responsibility within the village which only increased his opportunity to both help and protect the people of the village.
 
Now at the age of 21, Kinzoku continues to improve his skills as a shinobi as well as help and protect those who are in need. No matter how much stronger he got, there was always room for improvement. He needed to be at his best in order to protect and serve Suna as best as he could.

Likes: Cigars, meditating, practicing his aim/shooting, helping/protecting those in need, creating new items/weapons/armor
Dislikes: Liars, abuse of power, criminals.




Ninja Traits 
Rank: Jounin
Village: Suna
Element(s): Earth, Fire, Steel
Specialties: Kenjutsu, Ninjutsu, Genjutsu
Clan: Nazar
 
 
Stats
Health: 30
Chakra: 60
Stamina: 30
Speed: 50
Strength: 30


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Other Characters: Kotsuzui Kaguya
 


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PostSubject: Re: Kinzoku Nazar   Fri Sep 09, 2016 10:48 pm

Alright, just a few simple things. This is all I see so far...

Edit:

As for the arm, I doubt that's gonna work how you stated. For you gaining arm like so, would require medical spec knowledge, which you don't have. So without that knowledge since you said you made it, I don't see how you could give yourself a metal arm, plus that would need to be registered. I get that you forge stuff, but that won't fly. So if you could, please edit that.

Please include the whole character application. I know you don't have to do the RP sample, but if you could, that would be great, boss.

Unless you have permission from koroshi, you can't use him like how you did in your history, having meeting with him without his knowledge ooc. If you do, let me know and we can move on.
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Clan Element : Steel
Bloodline : Arahant
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PostSubject: Re: Kinzoku Nazar   Sun Sep 11, 2016 3:54 am

That makes sense, I hadn't thought of that. If i put in my history that a medic nin helped put my arm on would they be good enough? If not, if I change one of my specs to med would I be able to do it myself? And at the moment its technically just an arm, same health as the rest of his body. I do plan on creating it as an amour piece once the bio is accepted.

I hadn't put an RP sample because I don't think I have ever seen someone put one when creating a second application. I thought that if you wanted to see an RP sample you could just see my topics with Kotsuzui Kaguya?

So I didn't get permission from Koroshi. At first I thought the same thing, that i needed to ask him. I asked Nobunaga (one of the first Suna applicants) if he had asked Koroshi for permission (he also met with Koroshi in his history). He told me he did not, and Koroshi seemed ok with it. So I did the same and was just going to wait to see if Koroshi was ok with it or not.
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PostSubject: Re: Kinzoku Nazar   Wed Oct 19, 2016 12:50 pm

Alright stepping in with a few things, for starters with the contest rpc since they are supposed to be the heart of Suna I would prefer for them to be born in Suna. I know that some of the other rpcs have not and I have allowed them but I am trying to get this train back on track. With your family being from Volcano and having you in Suna is better, however I don't feel that the Nazar clan would send any emissaries to Suna, given that there is no real talk about the "enlightenment" besides trying to help people, Suna has always been a village that looks out for each other and outsiders. Such a village I would feel that the Nazar clan would take one look at and would say "They are already enlighten, let us try to seek out people in need"

Having no need to send emissaries that sort of ruins your family being here. That point aside the things that your father was doing, and having you do would be quickly picked up on by the villagers higher ups, people do not just vanish out of thin air, and if that started happening there would be a village wide search to make sure that everyone was save.

Next would be the issue with your time lining, I know it may be a bit hard given that you are trying to look at the history of two different villages, so let me try and help clear some things up, starting with the Volcano village. This village at first was just a minor village, mainly just a trading village who were able to stay funded because of the rich materials they were able to get out of the Volcano's and near by mountains, however they were briefly brought up to major village status when Osore took over the village, using it as the home of the brother hood. He was a Jashin cannibal who would often eat people, and would rule using his and his followers powers. When you would return to the village on your journey you would be welcomed back to this sort of place, your home being much lager, but filled with terror, people fearing for their lives that Osore would choose them to feast upon that day, or that Shouten would pick them to do experiments on. With you being raised by the Nazar clan any sort of Journey you would be on would be halted to try and save the home of your clan, and if you tried you would either be eaten or taken a part limb from limb to see how your clan works, if Shouten hasn't done that to the clan leaders already.

This puts a rather big hole in your story given that would be its end.


Another hiccup would be with you leaving, given that you a freshly ranked Chunin Suna would not allow you to go on such a journey without at least another chunin going along with you, Suna trust all of their shinobi, but to let someone of a rather low rank travel from village to village is dangerous.


So those different things in your history will need to be worked out if you do want to continue with this clan/rpc.


(Side note, I know they you may be wanting to keep that you have an arm made out of steel, who wouldn't? However this would need to be an open choice for you, not getting it just as a replacement, given that with medical ninjutsu Suna would have been able to craft you an arm made out of human tissue, so it would be as if you never lost anything.)


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PostSubject: Re: Kinzoku Nazar   Thu Oct 20, 2016 2:39 pm

Instead of editing my bio right away I'm going to ask you here if the changes I have in mind are ok so you don't have to waste time re-reading it all. 

I was unaware of the history of the volcano village being as it is. I was thinking of moving his history forward a bit. So i'd have Kinzoku's grandparents flee the village as a result of being afraid for their lives. As a result they would take refuge in Suna, as you mentioned they look out for outsiders. This way Kinzoku and his parents would all be born and raised in Suna as you'd like. So having said this, where exactly where Suna have been in their history in this point of the Volcano village? Just so I can get an idea of how to fit Suna's history into Kinzoku's.

I will change Kinzoku's father's business thing. I should have seen how silly it was. I'll also push him becoming a shinobi till after his journey so it doesn't conflict with the Suna shinobi system. I'll also add in that he willingly decided to go with a metal arm as it'll benefit his style as a shinobi.

If this seems somewhat ok with you, i'll get to re-working it
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PostSubject: Re: Kinzoku Nazar   Mon Nov 07, 2016 1:20 pm

We are currently trying to work up a good set timeline which will help out a lot of creations, however until that is fully made here is an idea of how the time line currently is.


The Volcano village became a major village roughly 5 years ago, so if you want your grand parents to leave because of that fear, then that would make it where you are not born for awhile.

However If you do want to have your grand parents come over sooner that is always a possibility, they could have moved because they did not agree with the ideals of the clan, or because they did not like that area, or even just because they wanted to go on their journey to find enlightenment and your grand parents met and fell in love in Suna.


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PostSubject: Re: Kinzoku Nazar   Mon Jan 02, 2017 2:10 am


Hi there, please let us know if this is still being worked on. <3


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PostSubject: Re: Kinzoku Nazar   Mon Jan 02, 2017 4:35 am

It is, I just recently edited it a couple weeks ago. I sent a private message to Koroshi telling him.
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PostSubject: Re: Kinzoku Nazar   Mon Jan 02, 2017 11:52 am


Thanks for letting me know. <3


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PostSubject: Re: Kinzoku Nazar   Tue Jan 10, 2017 6:20 pm

Very good, the only thing I would ask for you to change is the mention of Dust, this is a title and rank that is not known to anyone but the Kazekage and other Dust. After that is removed or changed around I would be happy to approve this :DD


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